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2020年北京市海淀区高三二模英语作文分析(2)
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一、评分原则:
1.本题总分为 20 分,按 5 个档次给分。
2.评分时,先根据文章的内容和语言质量初步确定其档次,然后以该档次的要求来衡 量,确定或调整档次,最后给分。
3.评分时应考虑:内容要点的完整性、上下文的连贯、词汇和句式的多样性及语言的 准确性。
4.拼写、标点符号或书写影响内容表达时,应视其影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及 词汇用法均可接受。
5.词数少于 60,从总分中减去 1 分。
参考Possible version 1:
Last weekend, an unexpected concert at the balcony made my day.上周末,阳台上一场意想不到的音乐会让我很开心。
On Sunday afternoon, when I was taking a break from my schoolwork, a clearmelody flowed in from the outside. It magically refreshed my tired mind and aroused my curiosity.
Hoping to find its source, I went to the balcony. A young man was playing hisviolin on the balcony across from mine, his eyes half closed in full enjoyment of the tune. Amazed by his playing, I listened on and was absorbed.
Unexpectedly, to the melody of the violin was added a wonderful chord of guitarfrom another neighbor. At this scene, I couldn’t help singing along and was surprisedwhen a girl also joined with her pure voice of a child. We hardly knew one another,but in our perfect harmony, we felt like old friends connected by our shared love ofmusic. Our little concert went on and on, fascinating the whole community.
With a closing chord on the guitar, the concert ended. We smiled and waved toeach other as if we had just woken up from a sweet dream of music. Our shared memory of the concert at the balcony would not fade away, from which I felt the power of music to inspire and connect people. 随着吉他的结束和弦,音乐会结束了。我们微笑着向对方挥手,仿佛我们刚从音乐的美梦中醒来。我们对阳台音乐会的共同记忆不会淡忘,从中我感受到了音乐的力量,它鼓舞着人们,将人们联系在一起。(213 words)
参考Possible version 2:
Last weekend, a special concert took place in my neighborhood. The uplifting music and heartwarming neighborliness kept resonating in my mind.上周末,在我家附近举行了一场特别的音乐会。令人振奋的音乐和温馨的邻里情谊一直在我的脑海中回荡。
Last Saturday afternoon, I was bored at home doing homework when a piece of beautiful music flowed into my room and refreshed me immediately.
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